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I am unseen, unwanted. Completely imperfect.
  I am disposable; forgettable, no more than an object.
I am your pet. A device; nothing but a vision.
  I am not someone. Unreal. Of soundless precision.

You won’t see me strain, or toil. You won’t see me fade.
  You won’t see my work, my life, my silent parade.
You won’t see my labor, my product; completely defective.
  You won’t see my service, my struggle, my muted objective.

Someday I’ll be gone, someday I’ll be dead.
  Someday I’ll be real, someday I’ll have bled.
Someday day you’ll recall me, your peripheral pawn.
  Someday you’ll remember me, by then I’ll be gone.

You won’t see me here; my worthless debris.
  You’ll be left alone, by then I’ll be free…
©2005-2009 ~iamthemonkeyhead
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Always feel like second best to something that doesnt matter.

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:iconastral-boy:
heh, I know the feeling. Well done, I like your rhymes... like object and perfect, it sounds original and interesting. :)
:iconiamthemonkeyhead:
thanks for the comment. Its my most conventional poem so far I think :P

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Perhaps the greatest confusion about death is based on the knowledge that nobody has ever experienced it and lived to tell the tale.
----Elvis really was The King. He died on the throne.
:iconpro-violence:
well label me slightly depressed after reading that

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If you are not free to choose wrongly and irresponsibly, you are not free at all.
:iconiamthemonkeyhead:
Awesome. I suppose I want you to feel like that when you read it. Only because it should create an effect, not because I want you depressed.

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----The greatest confusion about death is that nobody has ever experienced it and lived to tell the tale.
----Elvis really was The King. He died on the throne.
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:iconorangeradiokitty:
I think this is one of my favorite poems that you've written. And I'm glad that I can review it to! (I don't speak Spainish...) I like the rhythm, it's unique and different, and at the end of each line its like a punch, the rest on a spring winding up. I don't have much to say about anything bad, there really isn't anything to mention except a few words that hinder the flow a bit. My favorite line, "Someday day you’ll recall me, your peripheral pawn." You always have the most ingenious metaphorical images! I love them, keep up the stunning work! Oh, and props -- for conveying your ideas without swearing. Not that I mind, I just thought you'd be up to the challenge. ;)
:iconiamthemonkeyhead:
:D haha, so youve found me!
Thanks a lot for your support, I appreciate it. Oh, yeah I thought I could try not to swear in some pieces of mine. Its been hard but ultimately Im happier with the work without cussing in it.

Thanks again. Catchya :D

-cam

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----The greatest confusion about death is that nobody has ever experienced it and lived to tell the tale.
----Elvis really was The King. He died on the throne.
:iconx-macabre-x:
Mmm...excellent. Though a bit miserable. lol Although it sounds a little pathetic and helpless, you greatly expressed how you felt and used the right words to describe it. I normally don't enjoy depressing poems much, because they all usually sound the same to me...emo. But this one is different and an exception. Well done on your favorite.

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You don't understand peace until you have had suffering.
You don't understand love until you have had hate.
You don't understand life until you have died...
:iconiamthemonkeyhead:
Thankyou :)
And thanks for the fave.

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Perish all thought

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